Unit 3 Task 1 October 30, 2007

Unit 3 Task 1Task 1 Letter of Appeal

	Marks
Opening
1.          We  are writing to ask if it is possible to ask if it is possible for your airline to sponsor our students on educational field trips (State the purpose of writing)	1
Reasons
2.          New emphasis in education on providing students with a wider experience than the classroom alone can give	1
3.          the school is hoping to organize more field trip for students	1
4.          to destinations outside Hong Kong	1
5.          For this purpose, we hope that you can sponsor them on these trips	1
How airline will benefit
6.          Sponsorship will bring your airline a lot of benefits	1
7.          You have a keen interest in community work	1
8.          especially in educational field	1
9.          your airline is new to Hong Kong	1
10.      this generous gesture will help you gain goodwill and publicity	1
11.      Geography room in the school will be named as Sky Express Room	1
12.      offer to set up a stall for your airline in the school fair to be held in July	1
Business potential
13.      From the survey result we have conducted	1
14.      we know that over half of the our parents	1
15.      have responsibility for buying air tickets in their workplace
16.      Majority spend over $20000 a year on air travel for the family. (or any appropriate use of figures)	1
17.      Moreover, you may be aware that promotions aimed at children are a sensible investment	1
18.      As children influence their elders when making purchasing decisions	1
19.      Long lasting and strong customer loyalty develops when they are young	1
International Connection
20.      We are an international school with students coming from different parts of the world	1
21.      any good publicity will be carried around the world as students return to their home countries	1
Ending
22.      We would be most grateful if you could help our school	1
23.      We look forward to your favourable reply	1

 Marking Scheme 

	Marks
Content Points	23
Relevancy  (No mention of using the airline logo on school exercise books)	2
Readability and Organization	5
Language	5
Total	35

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14/10/2007(2) October 19, 2007

Children have rights to survive

‘Bump, bump, bump’. This voice is not from bombs. It is from three falling bodies. Today, there is one family tragedy again. Two children were pushed out from a building by their mother, then the mother committed suicide. It is hard to believe that the mother could kill her children. It is cruel. However, the fact shows that this kind of event happens more and more frequently. This alarms us that family problems can no long be marginalized.  

Prevention is always better than cure. To prevent this event from happening again, we must find out the root of family problems. Recently, a survey finds that working stress and financial problem will upset the relationship between parent and their children. This is easy to cause violence in home. 

The Government should base on this point and take actions intermediately. First, the Government should provide courses for companies to teach their staff how to handle working stress. Also, it should have more advertisements on television, radio and even MTR advertising board to let parent understand that they shouldn’t draw their stress on their children. Besides, the government should provide more family counselling services, helping them to solve family conflicts, arguments and provide financial assistance to lighten their expenditures. 

With the Government’s help, it is still not enough. Parents should take a deep reflection on how they treat their children. Nowadays, parents almost help their children make up all decisions; they think that decisions which they make are always correct and good for their children. Children simply like puppets, everything of them is controlled by their parents, even their lives. In the news, the mother also has this wrong idea. She thinks that children’s lives belong to her so she helped them to make a vital decision. Her notion is definitely unacceptable. 

When a baby is born, it has a life. It is a separate identity, no one is allowed to take away it’s life, even their parents. The mother was really selfish. She did not consider her children’s wants. Maybe the children want to see more about this world and they do not want to die so soon. Unluckily, they didn’t have any choices. This is unfair for them.

 I hope that parents can take good care of their lovely children now but remember good care is not equal to helping them to make all decisions.It is trying to see things from their views and understand what they feel.Parents, please remember that taking good care of children, is taking care of our future.  

Welcome for everyone’s comment^.^

(1) October 17, 2007

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